tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post1198132194754090506..comments2024-03-28T07:30:54.930+00:00Comments on The Prediction: Bandying the wicked wordsSandra Davieshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11788472031698175632noreply@blogger.comBlogger139125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-66480621423577093222017-05-19T04:57:45.923+01:002017-05-19T04:57:45.923+01:00Possibly the best title ever and yet another examp...Possibly the best title <b>ever</b> and yet another example of your wonderfully-inventive mind. Sandra Davieshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11788472031698175632noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-24715585985619664542017-05-19T02:33:31.482+01:002017-05-19T02:33:31.482+01:00A friendly mob queen is an oxymoron, though it doe...A friendly mob queen is an oxymoron, though it does have a quaint sound. This was a very well written if late entry that I hope others are able to read. <br />Your stories have always been enjoyable, entertaining and on the believable side. Foing this one all in narration is hard but successful.Jeffrey Yoriohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01533858278887271123noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-37530666558908410972017-05-19T01:31:30.473+01:002017-05-19T01:31:30.473+01:00This is terribly late, but I wanted to post it any...This is terribly late, but I wanted to post it anyways. I'll do better next week.<br /><br /><b>The Adventures of Rosebud, Pirate Princess #77<br />Deadly, but Obviously Well Balanced</b><br /><br />Georgiana told me all about her recent experiments in concealing poisons within aphrodisiacs. She introduced me to her partner in this scheme, Jamie, the most friendly mob queen I’ve ever met. Rosie Owenshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04081720470707818925noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-8314621908503100002017-05-19T00:11:07.553+01:002017-05-19T00:11:07.553+01:00Great composition and what a kicker of an ending. ...Great composition and what a kicker of an ending. Nice to see you return with such an excellent stand-alone.Patricia Purvishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09920488641153954463noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-17156757830520706262017-05-19T00:09:43.185+01:002017-05-19T00:09:43.185+01:00Nice attempt there, Jeffrey. I would urge you to s...Nice attempt there, Jeffrey. I would urge you to slow down a little and reread. Felt a bit rushed in places and could use some tightening up. But, on the whole, a very worthy venture in the world of horror.Patricia Purvishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09920488641153954463noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-72494694158223029532017-05-19T00:07:43.332+01:002017-05-19T00:07:43.332+01:00And how I've missed these little scenarios you...And how I've missed these little scenarios you put together with such skill. Easy to picture the scene taking place up there in black-and-white celluloid with a Robert Mitchum type in the leading role. Great clincher.Patricia Purvishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09920488641153954463noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-52901711285827727672017-05-19T00:05:54.608+01:002017-05-19T00:05:54.608+01:00I am amazed at the very different voice of the Mad...I am amazed at the very different voice of the Mad Italian from that of our seafaring Captain. It's almost like it's being written by an entirely different person...but then again, I suppose it really is. Love the questioning aspect of this.Patricia Purvishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09920488641153954463noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-80345913180937319262017-05-19T00:04:19.382+01:002017-05-19T00:04:19.382+01:00Oh, Zaire, your submissions are always such a joy....Oh, Zaire, your submissions are always such a joy. We have missed you. Don't stay away so long in future.Patricia Purvishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09920488641153954463noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-81245733495247238512017-05-19T00:03:16.635+01:002017-05-19T00:03:16.635+01:00Beautifully composed. Even at the end, I was, &quo...Beautifully composed. Even at the end, I was, "huh?" until I said "chews" out loud. How clever and indisputably witty. Lovely little tale.Patricia Purvishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09920488641153954463noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-3918422638812143292017-05-19T00:01:46.778+01:002017-05-19T00:01:46.778+01:00This was quite delicately lovely. I like the threa...This was quite delicately lovely. I like the thread of pictures and cameras and images...and, of course, memories. Moments in Time indeed. We all have them and they should be cherished.Patricia Purvishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09920488641153954463noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-82529010413620841762017-05-18T23:21:56.677+01:002017-05-18T23:21:56.677+01:00Ghostrunner;
In what context do you mean point t...Ghostrunner;<br /><br /> In what context do you mean point to point? To replace the phrase; A series of dots?Jeffrey Yoriohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01533858278887271123noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-65890638103681828732017-05-18T21:52:40.451+01:002017-05-18T21:52:40.451+01:00An excellent story and to me a but of irony that l...An excellent story and to me a but of irony that lonely souls to loney destinations just might be why she was out.<br />The way you were able to set the scene with ambiance, like a dinner table.Jeffrey Yoriohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01533858278887271123noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-4448885459308956972017-05-18T20:11:56.616+01:002017-05-18T20:11:56.616+01:00The impact of that long sentence after the several...The impact of that long sentence after the several short ones is beautifully well-judged. And I love the 'far off wail;. Sandra Davieshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11788472031698175632noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-90096967707303179422017-05-18T19:20:26.645+01:002017-05-18T19:20:26.645+01:00Thanks for the suggestion Jk. Though I'm writ...Thanks for the suggestion Jk. Though I'm writing a story, it's done through vignettes and I don't alwas need to start where the last one ended. My thanks for all your comments and that it's an enjoyable read.Jeffrey Yoriohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01533858278887271123noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-57872366726915185352017-05-18T19:13:51.638+01:002017-05-18T19:13:51.638+01:00Sorry, I didn't mean that Leonardo was referri...Sorry, I didn't mean that Leonardo was referring to your shop, I was as it would be a very good location to hide something in plain sight.Jeffrey Yoriohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01533858278887271123noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-18944995630883205912017-05-18T18:14:00.507+01:002017-05-18T18:14:00.507+01:00Loved it, effortlessly building a story, wonderful...Loved it, effortlessly building a story, wonderful pacing and phrasing; and as Antonia says fun toopracticehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05683589481404422674noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-79344772450826799322017-05-18T18:11:09.091+01:002017-05-18T18:11:09.091+01:00A killer final line! A killer final line! practicehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05683589481404422674noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-76973708472383752062017-05-18T18:10:42.929+01:002017-05-18T18:10:42.929+01:00OK, I park in the road parallel to the one where t...OK, I park in the road parallel to the one where the shop is located. Between parking the car and unlocking the shop door, this arrived full blown in my mind...<br /><br />Enjoyment<br />Is there a finer aphrodisiac than this:<br />A warm summer breeze<br />Gauze-like clouds drifting across a full moon<br />The sound of nocturnal wildlife trying to compete for that which sustains them<br />The Antonia Woodvillehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12594229396805493611noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-45493765864694399772017-05-18T18:08:46.341+01:002017-05-18T18:08:46.341+01:00so good, Bill, such a twist there!so good, Bill, such a twist there!Antonia Woodvillehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12594229396805493611noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-29084062723672094382017-05-18T18:08:07.816+01:002017-05-18T18:08:07.816+01:00not a bad attempt, Jeffrey, keep working at it...
...not a bad attempt, Jeffrey, keep working at it...<br /><br />BTW, what made you think Leonardo was referring to my shop? I read it three times and nowhere did it mention The Old Curiosity Shop or me!!!!Antonia Woodvillehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12594229396805493611noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-56270963778267704472017-05-18T18:06:54.358+01:002017-05-18T18:06:54.358+01:00I find it really difficult to get my head around w...I find it really difficult to get my head around writing serials with the prompt words not "fitting" what I think is the next instalment, so hats off to you (& others) for that.<br />If I may, you could have cut the first sentence as it doesn't seem to be integral to this bit? Would have given you some more words to play with...practicehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05683589481404422674noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-87163432546196990242017-05-18T18:01:18.217+01:002017-05-18T18:01:18.217+01:00Ewww... from the image of Kenny keeping notes tof ...Ewww... from the image of Kenny keeping notes tof the chocolate tainted end, this oozes dis-ease <br />practicehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05683589481404422674noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-15551720390218857242017-05-18T16:48:42.117+01:002017-05-18T16:48:42.117+01:00Very nicely written, humorous and well placed prom...Very nicely written, humorous and well placed prompts. Jeffrey Yoriohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17444112518637609193noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-62390525959232651422017-05-18T16:47:02.051+01:002017-05-18T16:47:02.051+01:00Horror, despite some of my earlier and rushed stor...Horror, despite some of my earlier and rushed stories, is a genre I've little experience and skill with. So, this is me branching out.<br /><br /><b>WOOLEY SWAMP</b> <br /><br /> Darion and Amanda were strenuously testing the shocks of Darion’s convertible, from the back seat. The Moon filed night sky was the newly engaged couples aphrodisiac. The legend of Woolly Swamp hadn't Jeffrey Yoriohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17444112518637609193noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-62893057309926907142017-05-18T14:13:34.730+01:002017-05-18T14:13:34.730+01:00Oh, Bill! Genuine inelegant cackle of laughter fro...Oh, Bill! Genuine inelegant cackle of laughter from me! A truly brilliant set up.Sandra Davieshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11788472031698175632noreply@blogger.com