tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post2806147316348862957..comments2024-03-28T07:30:54.930+00:00Comments on The Prediction: More than seven miles to Babylon, and ...Sandra Davieshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11788472031698175632noreply@blogger.comBlogger63125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-48845804945903613572015-08-17T06:32:19.449+01:002015-08-17T06:32:19.449+01:00Thanks for your nice commentThanks for your nice commentAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15169638175376848621noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-11965950644549238132015-08-14T05:45:12.995+01:002015-08-14T05:45:12.995+01:00And what an efficiently delivered, well-aimed kick...And what an efficiently delivered, well-aimed kick!Sandra Davieshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11788472031698175632noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-52619231502354683532015-08-14T05:41:54.000+01:002015-08-14T05:41:54.000+01:00Oh Mashie! Once again, I'm astounded at the r...Oh Mashie! Once again, I'm astounded at the range of your voices and your imagination.Sandra Davieshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11788472031698175632noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-651339709773423532015-08-14T05:35:09.031+01:002015-08-14T05:35:09.031+01:00Whoops - I can see I need to make things clearer! ...Whoops - I can see I need to make things clearer! It is the <i>narrator's</i> name Ravenscar doesn't know - and is intended to be quite the dramatic moment considering what they've gone through together for the past 76 episodes!Sandra Davieshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11788472031698175632noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-61865626699854272882015-08-14T03:12:45.624+01:002015-08-14T03:12:45.624+01:00A real gotcha! This one gets my vote. Ba-boom!A real gotcha! This one gets my vote. Ba-boom!1340https://www.blogger.com/profile/12739861909055681903noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-41351473997211013692015-08-14T03:10:46.844+01:002015-08-14T03:10:46.844+01:00OMG! It's gross and funny at the same time. I ...OMG! It's gross and funny at the same time. I have been known to commit doggerel and be pleased with myself, but when someone else does it, I love it because I can laugh without feeling guilty. Still, I wonder after Pearl has gone the distance, what's left of her to celebrate?1340https://www.blogger.com/profile/12739861909055681903noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-58098013694825714362015-08-14T03:05:52.035+01:002015-08-14T03:05:52.035+01:00The last half of this has the tone of the last pie...The last half of this has the tone of the last piece, but it seems lighter in the opening. You did say "racing against time" so that might account. Maybe I expected a "were" where I found a was. I don't know. Still following, though.1340https://www.blogger.com/profile/12739861909055681903noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-30751101578808638232015-08-14T03:02:26.833+01:002015-08-14T03:02:26.833+01:00It seems as if he's lost some of his anger dur...It seems as if he's lost some of his anger during the "creaking deckchair" moment, and I'm thinking that's a difficult thing to accomplish - a good solid reflective delay in three brief sentences.<br />Well done.1340https://www.blogger.com/profile/12739861909055681903noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-14650752129807767312015-08-14T02:55:02.379+01:002015-08-14T02:55:02.379+01:00I guess because I wanted to read dove instead of d...I guess because I wanted to read dove instead of dived (maybe my error), I noted it read the boulders dived rather than the brave young men. Then, I saw "he went out dreading" and after that I couldn't reckon the shadow smoking. The images would really solidify if the descriptors were closer to what they modify, but if you're writing fast, I see how that can happen. I frequently1340https://www.blogger.com/profile/12739861909055681903noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-28748919048918377022015-08-14T02:48:35.975+01:002015-08-14T02:48:35.975+01:00An oyster, or a pearl, made of a hundred different...An oyster, or a pearl, made of a hundred different death devices? I can't quite get my mind around that image, but I sure like the admitting of the need for magic. Laid on the line, that's cool.1340https://www.blogger.com/profile/12739861909055681903noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-50078638308669167502015-08-14T02:45:29.549+01:002015-08-14T02:45:29.549+01:00This reminds me of several rock-tinged novels I re...This reminds me of several rock-tinged novels I read a while back, but of course it's different and new. One thing, though, I heard light twice close together, but on checking saw Brightest Lamp and street light, but I think Peter also heard light twice as per his comment. It's just a distracted mind thing I guess.<br />I do like the atmosphere a lot.1340https://www.blogger.com/profile/12739861909055681903noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-9921136837920334872015-08-14T02:40:52.078+01:002015-08-14T02:40:52.078+01:00There are several odd-sounding almost East-Europea...There are several odd-sounding almost East-European names that give this a cherry pop feel rather than a deep red wine. But that's fine, as it is right in line with the mood of the day. I wish I had the time to read the pieces that led up to this. 1340https://www.blogger.com/profile/12739861909055681903noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-54258247345440870542015-08-14T02:32:48.190+01:002015-08-14T02:32:48.190+01:00This is a vampire, no? But not in search of the &q...This is a vampire, no? But not in search of the "life force," something rather more ephemeral. Smoking hot girls, indeed. I'd read more of this even having come late to the party.1340https://www.blogger.com/profile/12739861909055681903noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-82592248469888046072015-08-14T02:29:44.887+01:002015-08-14T02:29:44.887+01:00Love that last line. This has a nice dark gothic f...Love that last line. This has a nice dark gothic feel to it, and then it almost sounds modern with the forgetting of the horse's name. Ravenscar, on the other hand, is a wonderfully evocative name.1340https://www.blogger.com/profile/12739861909055681903noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-66310626389060602262015-08-13T23:52:20.510+01:002015-08-13T23:52:20.510+01:00'Oysters are an aphrodisiac, and sometimes the...'Oysters are an aphrodisiac, and sometimes there are pearls within.' <br /><br />Fabia parted her knees so that the Inquisitor's eyes were drawn into the shadow there.<br /><br />'I - I - asked what you were doing in the restaurant, not what you were eating. You'd best answer my question.'<br /><br />'They are not unlike Venus Fly Traps, dripping with nectar, sticky -&Mashiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13586160026765377447noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-54618872989332329532015-08-13T22:48:39.793+01:002015-08-13T22:48:39.793+01:00Yes, what now? Good hook into...what? Great moment...Yes, what now? Good hook into...what? Great momentumMashiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13586160026765377447noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-10132179755872095732015-08-13T22:47:06.090+01:002015-08-13T22:47:06.090+01:00Spare writing indeed. Another monster.Spare writing indeed. Another monster.Mashiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13586160026765377447noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-81233984201035204932015-08-13T22:45:52.515+01:002015-08-13T22:45:52.515+01:00Great monster you've created there.Great monster you've created there.Mashiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13586160026765377447noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-70248256106603187212015-08-13T22:43:15.834+01:002015-08-13T22:43:15.834+01:00Guinness Book of Records
Pearl always wanted fame...Guinness Book of Records<br /><br />Pearl always wanted fame,<br />For people to remember her name.<br />So she decided that it would be good<br />To eat as much of herself as she could.<br /><br />She roasted her feet with red onions<br />Declaring the best part her bunions.<br />Her legs, fried with her ears and her nose<br />We're fattier than she would suppose.<br /><br />She minced her Mashiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13586160026765377447noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-61752831664335301782015-08-13T21:17:27.937+01:002015-08-13T21:17:27.937+01:00Hi Peter,
Colleen and I have been writing this ser...Hi Peter,<br />Colleen and I have been writing this serial for years now. These are episodes, not complete shorts. We don't expect to win the competition with these, but rather use the prompts to improve and tighten our work and bring enjoyment to those who've followed the story from the start. The whole series is available at http://pushcomestoshove.blogspot.com/ RR Kovarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05165990070862127913noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-68116636488369256742015-08-13T17:27:58.390+01:002015-08-13T17:27:58.390+01:00I may be officially off-line. Still manage to snea...I may be officially off-line. Still manage to sneak on for a bit of prediction, though, Sandra. ;)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00387976371569878144noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-75469908500247995202015-08-13T15:13:15.044+01:002015-08-13T15:13:15.044+01:00Oh, poor Captain, how heavy and grey he sounds, wh...Oh, poor Captain, how heavy and grey he sounds, while remaining committed to his dreadful task..Sandra Davieshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11788472031698175632noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-11242906097828234202015-08-13T11:15:57.396+01:002015-08-13T11:15:57.396+01:00Nice piece, Peter, bringing a good atmosphere of b...Nice piece, Peter, bringing a good atmosphere of brooding menace with it somehow.Antonia Woodvillehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04596983420785260315noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-72095682659766759482015-08-13T11:14:42.545+01:002015-08-13T11:14:42.545+01:00clever piece of writing, bringing the reality of p...clever piece of writing, bringing the reality of pearl diving home to us. Liked it.Antonia Woodvillehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04596983420785260315noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-187530862792892291.post-52584443496365937872015-08-13T11:13:47.548+01:002015-08-13T11:13:47.548+01:00how to write without dialogue tags and keep the ac...how to write without dialogue tags and keep the action turning... but need more, much more! where next???Antonia Woodvillehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04596983420785260315noreply@blogger.com